Darkness Pt 1 Pt 1

OK so I was all BLUH BLUH I CAN DO 32 PAGES IN A NIGHT but that was obviously stupid and my hands hurt. I almost made it to my stopping point. First eleven pages go!

DARKNESS:
BLACK ROMANCE PT 1
by Brian Krantz

Caption: Leeworth Memorial Hospital
Boston, Massachusetts
February, 1990
6 AM

Caption: Guild of the Just
Providence, Rhode Island
February, 2011
Midnight

Panels 1-6
Split panels, opening on two buildings from parallel perspectives, one a run-down hospital at dawn, the other a damaged, smoking building with a number of unnecessary columns. Viewpoint moves closer to the entrance, then inside. The hospital is filled with doctors and patients busily moving about, but no major injuries. The hall of the Guild is filled with broken rubble, sputtering lights, and damaged walls. A green gloved hand is visible on the ground sticking from an open doorway.

Panels 7-8
Continuing down the hallways. The sign at the top of the hospital says Maternity Ward, and a woman is being wheeled out with her child in hand. In the hallways of the ruined building, superheroes are now plainly visible lying dead on the ground, burn marks on costumes, tragically positioned.

9-10 The viewpoint turns to angle around a door. A mother giving birth, only partially seen through the frame, father waiting by her side with his hand clasped around hers. Panel 8 shows a middle-aged superhero – an elder Superman analog - being held aloft by a thin arm attached to a huge, hi-tech, monstrous armored fist, struggling but helpless.

Panels 11-12: Full view from inside each room. A doctor holding aloft a crying baby, with as much graphic detail as possible obscured by hands and eyes. Panel 12: the titular villain, in black costuming (possibly a helm?) looking scornful. This is Darkness. He's in his early twenties, if that, and his costume is big and imposing but doesn't quite cover up his thin build. Costumed heroes lie in ruins around him.

Captions run between both panels. Some sort of identifying narrative bubble for Darkness.
D (Caption): This is me.

Page 3
Panel 13: Split panel set up is the same, but the viewpoints are no longer parallel. Close up of the doctors face.
Doctor: It's a beautiful baby b-
Panel 14: Hero and villain. D winds up with a gloved hand from a side view.

Panel 15: Same as 13. Doctor takes a shot to the nose with a childs foot.
Panel 16: Same view. Hero takes a very HARD blow to the face. Flying teeth, maybe.
D (Caption): I've always been like this.

Panel 17: Nurse catching the baby in a blanket as the doctor reels, father with shocked expression while mother is unconscious.
Doctor: My nobe! He broge by nobe!
Panel 18: Same side view, hero held aloft, all fight gone out of him.


Page 4: Panel 1: A shot of just the baby, sleeping peacefully.
Nurse (Off-screen): Just keep it held up like that, that's right -
Doctor: I'm a dogdor, I know how to tread a nobe!
Panel 2: D from the front. Two heroes behind him, readying blows – one with some sort of hammer or cool weapon, the other with glowing eyes.
D (Caption): Unstoppable.

Panel 3: High view of the hospital room. Zoom out on the baby, same position, in blankets on a table beside the bed. Doctor and nurse are gone. Little bloodspatter on the floor. Mother and father in the room together. Father clenching the unconscious mother, looking towards the baby, unsure of what to do. Child seems far away from the mother and father.

Panel 4: Lightshow. Techno gadget on either side of the D's costume activate as the heroes are suddenly electrocuted. Little letters etched in the glowing lights on the costume say NAN AUG – these are not central to the panels look.

D (Caption): Untouchable.

Panel 5: Zoomed out further. Hospital room is now small inside a black void. Same positioning of small family.

Panel 6: Villain turning and walking away from the burnt pair of heroes.

Caption: Except...

Page 5:
Panel 1: Wide panel across the top of the page. We're looking at the face of D, but younger, more gangly and nerdy. He's staring, forlorn look on his face.

Panel 2: Wider shot, showing a middle school from up high in the hall, lots of children carving a path. This panel is almost full page, with inset panels. From this view we can see that the children are deliberately cutting around D. We can also see the girl he's staring at, a prettyish blonde with thick-framed glasses (We'll call her S, why not)
Caption: ___ ___ middle school, 2002.

Panel 3-5: From the bottom. A few shots of S from D's perspective talking with friends, brushing hair back and noticing him, pushing up glasses as she smiles a little bit

Page6:
Panel 1: D, smiling a little bit as well.
Panel 2: Hand shoving D's head into a locker.
SFX: WHUD!
Bully: Whoops!
D (Caption): Once.
Panel 3: Wide panel. Large, older looking bully and some similarly friends, shoulder to shoulder around D like a pack of wolves. D is still recovering.
Bully: You should watch where you're going, loser.
Bully 2: Oh!
Bully 3: Ha ha!
D (Caption): Just once.
Panel 4: Still from the top. Withdrawn looking D looking down at the floor, bullies moving in closer.
B1: Well? Aren't you gonna apologize for running into me like that?
B2: Yeah, aren't you?
D: No.
Panel 5: Side cut of D and Bully. Bully leaning in closer, malicious look on face. Other bullies are faceless from this angle, just hulking shoulders. D still looking down.
Bully 1: That's a bad plan. Come on, apologize.
Panel 6: Same frame. Expression on D's face does not change. Bully looks impatient.
Panel 7: Same frame. Bully, sing-songy grin.
Bully 1: I'm waaaiiitiing...

Page 7:
Panel 1. Bullys hand rams the locker behind D, obscuring his face. Sound effect goes right around his head.
SFX: WHAM!
Bully 1: “Hey! Look at me when I'm talking to you!
Teacher (small): Hey!

Panel 2: D looks up into B's eyes, which puts his eyes over the bully's arm. B is smiling, D just looks like he hates everything.
Bully 2 (singing): uh oh, teachers coming!
Bully 1: That's better.

Panel 3: Bully pulls away casually. D's expression has not changed, clearly angry.
Teacher: (larger) Hey! What are you kids doing over there!
Bully: Saved by the bell, twerp.

Panel 4: D, alone, against the locker. Same expression of rage.

Panel 5: Bully pulls back into panel.
Bully 1: Oh, and...
Michael Jackson called.
He wants his glove back.

Panel 6: Close up of D from front.

Panel 7: Close up of B's face. Smug. Bullys can be seen behind him, as well as a balding teacher pushing his way through a crowd of kids.

Panel 8: Close up of D's hands. Clenched fists. One of the hands is a black glove that we now see in detail, which looks like a streamlined and less technologically complex version of the monster hands that are a part of his older supervillain costume.
D (Caption): But only once.

Page 8:
Panel 1: Full page panel. Lightshow. Radiant beams of energy enveloping the kid as he shrieks, terrible terrible damage. Everyone falling back in horror.

Page 9:
Panel 1: Pile of dust on the ground in front of D's feet.
Children: Oh my god!
Crazy!
Run!
Panel 2: D, leaning downwards into the panel, smug expression on face.
Panel 3: Shot of horrified teacher as D stands up to face him. Last of children fleeing around corners. Teacher is only person seen from any distance
Panel 4: Close up of horrified teacher.
Panel 5: Close up of smug looking D.
D: You didn't see anything.
Panel 6: Close up of glove again. Red crackling energy still sparking off it.
Panel 7: Close up of teacher, breaking into horrified sweat.
Panel 8: Same shot of teacher. Incredibly defeated expression.
Teacher: I... I didn't see anything.

Page 10:
Panel 1: Teacher, clutching textbooks, shuffles off. Broken husk of a man.
D (Caption): But...

Panel 2: D, raising his hands to his head, looking incredibly pleased with himself. S in background obscured by his skinny elbows.

Panel 3: D lowers his hand and begins to turn. S in background looking at him with cold expression of hatred and contempt.

Panel 4: The middle of the page. D turns and sees S, from a distance.
D (Caption): That's not what's important.

Panel 5: Shocked expression from D
Panel 6: Close up of cold anger from S.
Panel 7: S turns away, whipping hair around as she storms off.

Page 11:
Panel 1: Wide top panel of broken looking teenage D from front.
D: (Caption): What's important is this:
Panel 2: Large full panel of adult D's face, helm and all.
D (dialogue): There are no more heroes.
Panel 3: Wide panel of D sitting on a chair in the center of the League of the Just, dead folks all around. A smug-looking dude in a ponytail with a mechanical hand – Lefty – is filming him.

Page 12:

I have a comic book (probably three issues) almost completely written in my head. I did it about a month ago and it's still around, so we're going to try and get it all out. It's called "Darkness", and is awesome. That's all we're going to say for the moment.

Dramatis Personae
Darkness: The titular villain. Prodigy. Specialty is computers, robots and augmentative technology centered around nanomachines (NanAug). Thinks the world revolves around him. It mostly does. Refuses to change his supervillain name even though he is well aware it is dumb.

Silverheart: The second. Trainee and prodigy of Silverheart the first, martial artist and swordswoman. Naively idealistic.

Lefty: A previous trainee of Silverheart the first, who abandoned his mentor in favor of a lazier route to power (NanAug). Left-handed, obviously.

Kee: Silverhearts completely off-screen hacker. Basically a Wrench.